This student has demonstrated strong upper division level writing through the use of varied sentence structure, a sophisticated vocabulary, and a strong command of written English. It is a superior response in timed-writing conditions. Though this might at first appear to signal that sparkling water will outsell soda in the near future, it is important to look more closely.
Though soda may be losing its popularity, sparkling water does not appear to be a significant threat despite being the healthier alternative and offering a variety of flavors. Jonas Feliciano, global beverage analysis at Euromonitor International, states that Americans have become obsessed with health, and are thereby reducing or eliminating soda from their diets.
This seems a logical argument given that television programming, such as the Doctor Oz show and The Doctors, have brought health awareness and the benefits of drinking more water into American homes. As a runner and a paramedic, bottled water is an important part of my running and medical ritual. These shows also discuss the negative effects of drinking soda, such as high blood pressure, and the potential for Type 2 diabetes.
Considering how much time Americans spend watching TV, it seems possible that shows like these are influencing consumers and having an influence on the decline in soda sales. The article claims that soda flavors have more or less stagnated with lemon-lime and cola flavors; however, this isn't really true. Coca-Cola, Dr. Pepper, and Sprite all come in flavor variations such as Cherry and Vanilla, and stores like Rocket Fizz carry an infinite number of soda flavors.
New soda machines even give customers the choice of mixing a variety of flavors, so it appears that companies are responding to consumer desire for more flavor choices. Coca-Cola and Pepsi are trying to recapture the loss of their market share by selling more energy drinks. Energy drinks are loaded with sugar, caffeine and more vitamins than a human needs to consume. Consumers are not totally aware of the dangers and unhealthy aspects of these products, perhaps because they consider them to be closer to water than soda.
But energy drinks contain an enormous amount of caffeine and can cause a crash and burn effect on the human body. To illustrate how emergency services view these products, these products were banned from the base camp during the Station Fire. The marketing of these products is in many instances deceptive.
Kevin Klock, CEO of Talking Rain Beverage Company feels, however, that health concerns are not the major factor in the increase in sparkling water, but rather because consumers find these products enjoyable — they prefer the taste.
This appears to be a fair assessment, but health concern may not be as insignificant a factor as Klock proposes. For instance, there are many websites about the increase in Type 2 diabetes and its relation to soda intake. Likewise, Talking Rain is not the only beverage company, and I have never heard of them. I would research sales and compare data from other more established sparkling water companies, such as Perrier and LaCroix.
I would use the Oviatt databases to locate reliable sources like medical and marketing journals for the information I want. Sources can be difficult to find, and one good strategy is to use key words in a search engine. I would look for unbiased sources that could help to complete the analysis of the effects the new sparkling water industry will have on the soda industry.
In conclusion, is sparkling water the new soda? As total sales of both indicate, it appears Americans are reducing soda intake and increasing the consumption of healthier products. Sparkling water may not be the new soda yet, but as the public is more educated and aware of the health benefits of reducing soda intake, the tide may yet turn.
Sparkling water will be the new soda someday. The opening paragraph demonstrates a good understanding of the issue, and the student offers insight from the graphs to rebut the claim that soda is being replaced by sparkling water.
Lally more attentive in person. Dean wanted to bring the lessons of the retreat to a neighborhood bar. On a soggy night last month, people attended the first device-free event, held at Jones Bar, between 6 and 9 p. Felix added. Support your point with original and compelling arguments that go beyond those suggested in the article. Focus on clarity and precision.
Although humor and satire are difficult to write, humor is welcome if it serves the topic. Avoid overly satiric writing since it may take away from a focused response to the prompt. Often students think that a conclusion to a short persuasive essay needs to repeat all of the main ideas.
This strategy may be useful for long, technical reports or complicated pieces of writing. However, for short, argumentative essays, don't waste time repeating yourself, and don't insult your readers' intelligence by going over material that you've already clearly outlined.
Instead, use your conclusion for an appropriate closing of your essay; it's the last part of your argument that you give your reader, so leave a good impression: make an appeal, give a solution, restate your position more clearly, point to the future, etc. Don't sum up the obvious. Be thoughtful. A steady paycheck takes precedence over taking time off to vote. If a lack of time is a common obstacle to voting, the solution seems simple enough: Election Day should be a national holiday.
Pundits and public officials alike complain of the low voter turnout each election year. Voter apathy is a serious problem in this country. If the government wants to increase public interest in the fundamental democratic freedom of voting, then Congress should take the appropriate steps to make Election Day a national holiday.
Can you make a stronger argument for why Cal Poly should require a GE course on personal finances or for why there should not be a personal finance GE requirement? Take the position that will provide you with support for the stronger argument.
However, do not spend a lot of time setting up the counterargument. While the ability to refute an opposing viewpoint can help the development of your argument, too much discussion of why someone might disagree with you has to potential make you appear to waiver in your stance. Acknowledge the opposing view then tell your reader why it is wrong.
Is your tone appropriate for an academic audience? In one paragraph, the writer expands the discussion that soda seems to be losing its popularity because people are becoming more health conscious, but subsequent paragraphs suggest that soda will remain popular. Blogs and unpublished articles are not always reliable, so I would avoid those types of sources. The at-home carbonation machine company has shifted its marketing in recent months to focus more on the product's ability to make sparkling water and less on its ability to make soda. Now, for the first time, soda consumption has declined by nearly twenty-five percent, while sparkling water consumption has gone up to balance the change.
They were believed to be healthy, then proven to be lethal, and everyone thought the cigarette industry would die as a result.
If you write quickly, you should have at least fifteen minutes to make sure you've used appropriate examples, that your paragraphs are in order, that your facts are accurate, etc. Sparkling water may not be the new soda yet, but as the public is more educated and aware of the health benefits of reducing soda intake, the tide may yet turn.
Support your point with original and compelling arguments that go beyond those suggested in the article. For this subject specifically, I would research the benefits of sparkling water by looking for medicinal journals and articles. Instead, use your conclusion for an appropriate closing of your essay; it's the last part of your argument that you give your reader, so leave a good impression: make an appeal, give a solution, restate your position more clearly, point to the future, etc.
Instead, use the appropriate number of paragraphs to prove adequately the position you take. Participants surrender all their devices and are taught yoga, meditation and healthy cooking. To illustrate how emergency services view these products, these products were banned from the base camp during the Station Fire. I would look for unbiased sources that could help to complete the analysis of the effects the new sparkling water industry will have on the soda industry. Pundits and public officials alike complain of the low voter turnout each election year.
Take the position that will provide you with support for the stronger argument. Dean wanted to bring the lessons of the retreat to a neighborhood bar. Although humor and satire are difficult to write, humor is welcome if it serves the topic. This student has demonstrated strong upper division level writing through the use of varied sentence structure, a sophisticated vocabulary, and a strong command of written English. It is important to emphasize the importance of doing research in what we are consuming rather than believing what is told from those who are selling the product on TV. That, and the price differences between the two.
The world saw a similar phenomenon when cigarettes were invented. If you do not agree, then defend your position and propose an alternative solution to the problem of low voter turnout in the U. We have spent countless hours watching debates, listening to pundits, and being bombarded with TV ads.
The marketing of these products is in many instances deceptive.